Doukutsu Ou kara Hajimeru Rakuen Life ~Bannou no Saikutsu Skill de Saikyou ni!?~ - Ch. 36.1

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Oh my god! As if this backstory that nobody cares about wasn't bad enough, and as if the possession of our FMC wasn't even worse, now they're continuing both while torturing MC by having the FMC right there and unable to hear him. Please, mangaka, end this arc already!
 
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the plot from this arc is WAY too complicated for it's own good... also the slow release doesn't help. what i got so far from the story is:
  • there was a calamity so bad, it forced that kingdom into hiding, and they did something similar to suspended animation to everyone
  • the cave king crest, and the dryad crest are important, but why?
  • is that queen an ally or what?
  • what happened that made the calamity disappear? and will it come back again, considering all this lore dump we've been getting?
This arc would've been fine had we got reina back before this fucking lore dump
 
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Plot reminds me a bit of Horizon Zero Dawn.
Wonder if there were any other stories like that (i.e. ones where the past civilization pretty much has to end itself to stop whatever calamity they're facing) that've managed to pass me by, 'cos that was the first thing it reminded of me as well.
Granted, something like the past civilization attempting to return in Helck would probably be closer to the end result here (past civilization survives in some form, with some plan to return), but the scale and apparent all-consuming nature of the calamity (plus the desperate tone in the work done toward stopping it) definitely hit the Horizon vibes.
 
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Wouldn't it be cool if the story about diggy diggy hole had lore organically revealed through anthropological finds rather than some lore dump?
 
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I am flabbergasted at how quickly this arc has made me not care about the story at all. I loved this series when it started. Sure it was simple and pretty typical of those "I was kicked out for being useless but I'm actually OP" wish-fulfillment stories that dominate fantasy series, but it was fun. This arc is like the writer wrote down all this background lore and worldbuilding and was like "fuck it. I spent weeks doing this so now the audience is going to get every single fragment of it given to them to appreciate the hard work I did." without considering how much of a drag it is. It's overly complicated, kinda navel-gazey and pretentious, and likely mostly unnecessary to the story at hand.

A secret of good writing, that a lot of mediocre writers ignore, is that you should always have more background and lore than you need for your story. Give the sense that there's more to the world beyond what you show the readers even if you don't show it. And learn to make the tough choices about cutting things that don't contribute to the story even if you think they're interesting (or if you can't do that yourself, get yourself an editor who can do it for you.)
This right here
 

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