Started out interesting, but has definitely fallen flat now. The early chapters had a clear vision and goal, but now it completely aimless and sloppy.
Even bad stories can be fun as long as the story is going somewhere, while this story is both weak and just going in circles. Dropping this.
Examples
Even bad stories can be fun as long as the story is going somewhere, while this story is both weak and just going in circles. Dropping this.
Examples
Childhood friend apparently has this super amazing blessing that kingdoms would kill to have, but somehow she is utterly incapable of doing anything without MC enchanting nearly every arrow. Why? If her blessing is literally nothing but to hit a target, but does nothing about the power of the hit then it's value is pretty sad in a world with actual hero's. So, why? It's a unique idea for a blessing, but the author does nothing with the idea.
Tons of training shown/hinted while young with no issues, in school, random light use of magic and suddenly she has a serious mana overuse disorder? Why? Which also happens to have a perfectly absurd solution. Just why? The way this story thread is playing out is painful to read.
The whole young girl kidnapping arc, again, why? Our MC doesn't really grow from it, all we really get is a reminder that our MC is actually incredibly weak for a reincarnator with cheats (and extensive battle experience). Unless you want to call her new ideas in self-puppeting a form of growth, but again, why? MC talks all the time about hiding the fact that she has the thread manipulation ability, but the story making her increasingly dependent on them is not forward growth, that's backwards dependence on what she had in the past. Her whole goal is to become a hero herself while hiding her past, the story itself however, seems to be actively trying to prevent that from happening.
The childhood friend randomly gets gifted a superweapon that they can't use... Why? Again, fun idea, but it would have been way better if it was loaned weapon, maybe a promise to get it again once she's able to use it or accomplishes some deed. Now it's just unearned baggage with no apparent purpose. This would be fine if the story was actually moving forward, but with it's pacing, it won't get touched again for an extremely long time, by which time readers will forget it existed.
The whole school arc overall seems very haphazard, she has a super powered magical mother who provided her direct magic training throughout her childhood years, are you seriously going to believe that she hasn't already learned all these fundamental aspects of magic that fill the school discussions? Or that her mother was having her perform all that magic training without ever testing MCs magic capabilities? Considering that somehow magic overuse disorder is such a terrible problem, there's no way that the hero mom would do that. Again, everything we've seen at the school has been almost entirely redundant and would have been better shown while she was at home.
The author seems to REALLY want to smash all the hero characters together for 'drama', and considering how much raw potential there is for storytelling there, the fact that what we have been getting is so bland makes me lose all hope in their ability to tell a good story. I mean so many amazing stories out there start with absolutely no backstory and just come to life, while this story has all the setup and support it needs but just flops.
Tons of training shown/hinted while young with no issues, in school, random light use of magic and suddenly she has a serious mana overuse disorder? Why? Which also happens to have a perfectly absurd solution. Just why? The way this story thread is playing out is painful to read.
The whole young girl kidnapping arc, again, why? Our MC doesn't really grow from it, all we really get is a reminder that our MC is actually incredibly weak for a reincarnator with cheats (and extensive battle experience). Unless you want to call her new ideas in self-puppeting a form of growth, but again, why? MC talks all the time about hiding the fact that she has the thread manipulation ability, but the story making her increasingly dependent on them is not forward growth, that's backwards dependence on what she had in the past. Her whole goal is to become a hero herself while hiding her past, the story itself however, seems to be actively trying to prevent that from happening.
The childhood friend randomly gets gifted a superweapon that they can't use... Why? Again, fun idea, but it would have been way better if it was loaned weapon, maybe a promise to get it again once she's able to use it or accomplishes some deed. Now it's just unearned baggage with no apparent purpose. This would be fine if the story was actually moving forward, but with it's pacing, it won't get touched again for an extremely long time, by which time readers will forget it existed.
The whole school arc overall seems very haphazard, she has a super powered magical mother who provided her direct magic training throughout her childhood years, are you seriously going to believe that she hasn't already learned all these fundamental aspects of magic that fill the school discussions? Or that her mother was having her perform all that magic training without ever testing MCs magic capabilities? Considering that somehow magic overuse disorder is such a terrible problem, there's no way that the hero mom would do that. Again, everything we've seen at the school has been almost entirely redundant and would have been better shown while she was at home.
The author seems to REALLY want to smash all the hero characters together for 'drama', and considering how much raw potential there is for storytelling there, the fact that what we have been getting is so bland makes me lose all hope in their ability to tell a good story. I mean so many amazing stories out there start with absolutely no backstory and just come to life, while this story has all the setup and support it needs but just flops.
