Hi, since you asked for comments... so far the only issue is that the english is very unnatural and hard to read; it's like you picked up the very first result the dictionary gave you when checking the meaning of a certain word without seeing if there was another one that would fit better in the specific context.
Similarly, there are a few grammatical errors here and there, like missing "the" or the like or using the incorrect conjugation.
Some examples to make it practical:
page 2, "Agriculture city, Farm Edge!" -> "the agriculture city, Farm Edge!"
page 3, "approximately one hour from the border" -> "a hour of walk away from the city"
page 3, "there pastures for grazing" -> "there are pastures for grazing"
and so on.