Good effort. Redrawing is just something that will come after time and consistent effort & practice. Picking up previous chapter raws and practicing with those will help you match the style of the artist for this series specifically--and doing that for any given series will help with each distinct style of illustration.
But there's no "magic fix"--just comes down to consistent applied effort.
Beyond that - look around for various tools like different fonts and so on--keep things like readability in mind, and look at other established & successful groups to see how they do things like typesetting and the like. Cleanliness of presentation is a big part of TL work, and while it will take time and improve the more you do it, spending some of that actively studying other quality TL releases and practicing on your own time (when you are able) will push the quality of your own work all the more.
Only other thing I would say, as an etiquette thing--sometimes groups working on certain series just get held up with stuff and don't keep a regular release schedule. Contacting them first if it's been awhile and seeing if it's okay to release a chapter, can go a long way to ensuring you're not stepping on others' toes. There is a general dislike of "snipers" in the TL community, so anything you can reasonably do to avoid that sort of situation will earn you goodwill.
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To the chapter itself--yeah, PrettyBoy's not going to give up. Clearly he's used to just getting whatever he feels he's "owed", but hopefully this won't turn into an entire volume's worth of chapters of dealing with him.
ML needs to get his act together, though. Looks like he finally sorted through the fact that he's
not okay with her "just dating anyone", but he'll need to stop doing this in half-measures, just as his friend said.
They've got support, and even if she doesn't "get" romantic relationships or dating (a well-worn
trope, but I'm not getting into that here), it's clear the FL
does enjoy spending time with him,
for him. He's clearly important to her. And even if their relationship progresses and doesn't look "conventional" or whatever, as long as it makes sense to them....that's what's important.
They're already pseudo-parenting between them, anyway. In some senses they've skipped steps in the cohabitation phase of life so. I'm betting she'd not let her kid brother be taken care of by just
anyone.
As is always the case--they need to just sit down and talk about what they want. He needs to get over this "am I really good enough" mental block, and she needs to be told clearly that he likes her and wants to be with her romantically--but that they can not sweat the "how-to" business, just keep doing what they're doing, but that maybe they should go see a movie by themselves sans
children siblings, or someth
Good effort. Redrawing is just something that will come after time and consistent effort & practice. Picking up previous chapter raws and practicing with those will help you match the style of the artist for this series specifically--and doing that for any given series will help with each distinct style of illustration.
But there's no "magic fix"--just comes down to consistent applied effort.
Beyond that - look around for various tools like different fonts and so on--keep things like readability in mind, and look at other established & successful groups to see how they do things like typesetting and the like. Cleanliness of presentation is a big part of TL work, and while it will take time and improve the more you do it, spending some of that actively studying other quality TL releases and practicing on your own time (when you are able) will push the quality of your own work all the more.
Only other thing I would say, as an etiquette thing--sometimes groups working on certain series just get held up with stuff and don't keep a regular release schedule. Contacting them first if it's been awhile and seeing if it's okay to release a chapter, can go a long way to ensuring you're not stepping on others' toes. There is a general dislike of "snipers" in the TL community, so anything you can reasonably do to avoid that sort of situation will earn you goodwill.
--
To the chapter itself--yeah, PrettyBoy's not going to give up. Clearly he's used to just getting whatever he feels he's "owed", but hopefully this won't turn into an entire volume's worth of chapters of dealing with him.
ML needs to get his act together, though. Looks like he finally sorted through the fact that he's not okay with her "just dating anyone", but he'll need to stop doing this in half-measures, just as his friend said.
They've got support, and even if she doesn't "get" romantic relationships or dating (a well-worn
trope, but I'm not getting into that here), it's clear the FL does enjoy spending time with him, for him. He's clearly important to her. And even if their relationship progresses and doesn't look "conventional" or whatever, as long as it makes sense to them....that's what's important.
They're already pseudo-parenting between them, anyway. In some senses they've skipped steps in the cohabitation phase of life so. I'm betting she'd not let her kid brother be taken care of by just anyone.
As is always the case--they need to just sit down and talk about what they want. He needs to get over this "am I really good enough" mental block, and she needs to be told clearly that he likes her and wants to be with her romantically--but that they can not sweat the "how-to" business, just keep doing what they're doing, but that maybe they should go see a movie by themselves sans children siblings, or something.
holy yap. Relax buddy