The paneling and pacing feels kind of weird? Like, it's hard to follow the story, maybe it's because the art style doesn't use any bold lines but everything just seems kind of messy.
The shallow personalities and 0 IQ of all the characters makes sense since the MC created the story when she was in middle school or whatever but isn't the MC too dumb?? Did her brain age regress when she transmigrated? I get that this is supposed to be a comedic parody but it's kind of embarrassing to see the situations she gets in, but maybe that's just me.
Don't get me wrong, I'm a sucker for cliche tropes and parodies at times (I really recommend that one manga where a guy gets transported to the world of an otome game, I don't remember the title) but this is just bad.