Though I May Be a Villainess, I'll Show You I Can Obtain Happiness! - Vol. 10 Ch. 3 - The Veil Princess Smiles at Night: The Real Reason She Hid Her …

[Grye]

get some new material

 

[Scrabbleman]

Why didn't anyone tell the Prince about the demons haunting their bloodline? And even if they did tell him, why didn't they make sure to remind him? AND WHY DIDN'T THE VILLAINESS TELL HIM THAT?!

Everyone in this story is an asshole. The Villainess, the Prince, the Commoner, even the Spirit King and Human King.

 

[thatevilman]

This volume was off to a good start but this chapter? Ehh.

 

[blackLuna]

This will be the last chapter for this week, I'll be taking a break now. Thanks for reading!

Thank you for your hard work.

One problem of usage (all too common in translations of East Asian works, even "official" ones): "annulling" engagements (that's not English or any major Western language).

In the Western world, engagements are promises, thus you can cancel them, break them, break them off, or (sometimes, usually when there's paperwork associated with the promise) dissolve them. (Westerners historically considered promises, especially formal promises, binding in and of themselves.)

It's marriages, which as contracts, can be annulled/declared invalid on one hand or on the other rendered void while both parties are alive (in other words, a divorce). (FYI, annulled marriages are considered from a legal and religious standpoint to have never existed to begin with, to the point where any children produced by the couple during the marriage are rendered illegitimate.) Non-consummation, by the way, was grounds for annulment, not divorce.

As long as the story does not describe there being a contract involved with the engagement, referring to an annulment in the context, as here, is straight up wrong and sloppy.

In fact, even then, the engagement itself is not a contract as far as Westerners are concerned — our language when referring to engagements follows suit. Thus, even East Asian work translated into a Western language needs to avoid what most Westerners would understand as nonsense or poor quality, even MTL, as much as possible.

 

[omnistraight]

happy belated birthday and thanks for another great translation!!

 

[Psychronia]

Rest well, translator.

There's a skeleton of a decent story here, but the devil is in the details and the author just missed this time. Too bad, as the art would have well suited a story that actually earned its twists.

Do tell, now I'm curious

Rather than complaining about the generic plot, maybe the comments can play a game where we try to make the story more interesting without breaking the core concept.
I believe the key issue with this one besides how common it is are how it's stupid the prince didn't know and the random spirit king love interest leaving a bad taste in people's mouth-especially when it's a grown-ass centuries old spirit wooing a mortal girl at face value.

So let's see...

1. While it's possible and has precedent in better villainess stories for the prince to have actually been educated and his willful ignorance caused him to forget or just refuse to listen, that's still a cheap out. How about we make it so he writes it off as superstition because most humans can't perceive the evil spirits? Perhaps the prince started small and as nothing bad happened even as his mistreatment of/distance from her grew more and more, he misunderstood her skill/respect for the promise as her not actually doing anything at all?
   Alternatively, we could have it be a full-on evil scheme to intentionally mislead and entrap the prince into doing exactly this so she can be free.
2. For the love interest, we really didn't need it at all. But if we were to force one, how about we make the Spirit King...also her? I'm getting the vibe that she's already got a high affinity for spirit life, so we could make it more about her being constrained to mortal form as part of some old contract and using this newfound freedom to find and unite with her other half.

 

[Cosmic_Zero_VC_NVA]

aside from the art, actual slop