Aisare Tenshi na Classmate ga, Ore ni Dake Itazura ni Hohoemu - Ch. 1
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Please brush up on typesetting.
"by
manipul
ating
both
bitterne
ss and
acidity"
this is difficult to read.
Split the word on syllables, and put in a hyphen when you do, on the leading line. And there's no real explanation for that "ss" getting shunted down a line.
"by
manipu-
lating
both
bitterness
and
acidity" reads better... and there's no bubble you're constrained by so it should be OK to do so.
"by
manipul
ating
both
bitterne
ss and
acidity"
this is difficult to read.
Split the word on syllables, and put in a hyphen when you do, on the leading line. And there's no real explanation for that "ss" getting shunted down a line.
"by
manipu-
lating
both
bitterness
and
acidity" reads better... and there's no bubble you're constrained by so it should be OK to do so.
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some feedback here:
- when there's a handwritten sentence, you should erase/RD it instead of having the translation by it. that works for sound effects, but those are still part of the dialogue
- when splitting a word between lines, add a hyphen at the end of the first chunk
- chatgpt is not a reliable way to translate, so be aware if you do get a jptl on board, the quality of the translation will improve quickly and drastically
- you appear to be struggling with some grammar and punctuation. try putting the dialogue into an empty google doc and seeing what autocorrect catches
- "ex. clu. sive" is an ok way to write the emphasis breaks, but maybe have it horizontally instead
- "fuzzy" on chapter 46, that's a sound effect for him blushing. "flustered" or "blush" would work better
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Giving food to someone is definitely addicting, I understand
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I smell trouble with this one....
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What the heck she's ....
scary....?!
Looks like MC has flipped a dangerous switch
scary....?!
Looks like MC has flipped a dangerous switch
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A strong heroine with her own goals as well! I'm rooting for her
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Cool PFP Btw
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It was always there, but her fangirls kept her from exploring a lot of things she's interested in. A whole lot of things.
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Damnit I thought I'll finally see a romcom where the main couple start of as friends and have to develop feeling for each other, last few page really ruined that, can't we have a normal start anymore, are zoomer attention span so shitty you can't read through actual development and need the characters to be head over heels first chapter in
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You may be misunderstanding things a bit. Chika is, obviously, thrilled and tickled that a guy with so many shared interests is interested in her...even if it's only for her evaluations. For now. And that he's willing to help her break free from the golden chains that have held her down for so long.
But he's nowhere near that level toward her. Until now, he's only ever thought about his career aspirations and proving his parents wrong. Girls were just his marketing targets and focus groups. He's only just now about to begin to become aware that there's maybe more to them than that. Specifically, more to this one girl. It's an extremely slow process he has to go through, one that even near the end of the second LN he doesn't fully understand as being what it is. Even though literally everyone around him can see it happening. "What am i being forced to watch?" -- her dad
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My gripe is more towards girl character being instantly so chummy and open towards a guy they just know for few minutes, which I've seen way to much lately, I want strangers to act like strangers toward another stranger man not flirting on first day pulling his face close and shit, I check the next and they're basically besties already and they've talk for few min
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He didn't just meet her, though. She's been part of the tasting group for a fair bit before the series begins.
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Doesn't disprove anything, and with how her friends is they probably never talked, they're pretty much stranger, or at best acquaintance, but by the end lf the chapter they(she) not acting like stranger, is that so hard to understand
It's because she is attracted to him. My experience with girls has been if they are interested in you, the give some pretty strong yes signals right away. At least the girls I've interacted with. My wife is a quiet introvert with most people, but never with me from the outset. Maybe she's not thinking "I'm gonna bang this guy" but "This guy is interesting" and naturally uses her charm.
Also, she's not taking a risk, the guy is a known quantity in the school. Hell realistically if there was a guy like that, he'd be swarmed with both men and women. A passionate extroverted man who brings in home baked pastries? That sort of personality is magnetic to most people, male or female.
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