Imasara desu ga, Osananajimi wo Suki ni Natte Shimaimashita - Ch. 28 - As The Short Journey Ends (First Half)

[IronicWeeaboo]

Even if Yami "loses", the childhood cuckquean will never be his first time, nor even the second or even the third

 

[noleafclover75]

That's not pacing, that's release schedule

The release schedule has never changed. Every 2 weeks is the release schedule. I don't understand how that wouldn't be a pacing issue.

 

[Dingo777]

I wonder if people are mistaking "misdirection" for "bad," considering the start of the manga. I think it's meant to be an arc; we start with the innocent childhood friend HIkari, then twist! He's already in a red flag relationship with Yami. But that's two acts from a three-part arc.

The early sugar with Hikari was a misdirection, not a bad story. The hints that Yami is a doomed ship are constant. Hikari is probably going to swoop in a save Yuu from the wreckage.

Guessing that what Yami is hinting at is a move. Now that parents are divorced, maybe Mom is taking her to her hometown or relocating for work. She hasn't told Yuu that it's coming.

Stopping the story mid-climax for a protracted flashback is generally regarded as poor writing. Which I agree with, the author got lost in the sauce and lost sight of what his story was about and what drew his readers in.

 

[GreenOwlRanger]

I still don't understand why you would pivot to something entirely different for so long. Like, this isn't Luffy's backstory, this has barely anything to do with what was presented first.

I think it's quite a valid criticism when the tone and subject switch so abruptly and sharply. It certainly would have helped, if this part was intended to be the main story, to not linger so long in such a light-hearted manner on the childhood friend.

This reeks of author ADD, and yeah, I think this was a bad twist, and people are justified in dropping this.

There was also "My wife has no emotions" that did something similar, suddenly transforming into a spy thriller about robot terrorist in the middle of a slice of life.

It's not that you can't have heavier subjects when you start with something light, it's more that you need to know how to bring it up correctly, and both have honestly done so very poorly.

But here the writing is very... unpleasant? How should I say... it reeks of forced angst? Running towards a foregone conclusion? It just feels both boring and pointless to me, and I'm sure I'm not the only one. Relationships are often fun to witness because you don't see where they're going.

 

[NotSomeone]

Not going to lie, I know people here hate vanilla, but I enjoy Yami's and Yuu's relationship so far. Really cements why they got so heated in chapter 21 and kissed. But Yami's insecurities are ruining her and tainting her relationship. Just hope that the next chapter is still vanilla.

At this point I like their relationship enough that I just would like them to be together and for the main girl to find someone else lol

 

[KaiserBeo]

Hikaricels it might be time for the rebound. Maybe. Until then the Yami Gang is still up, but as she stated herself, she's counting down to something.

 

[RakshaJaeger]

like with rent a gf i see new chapter i read it, i do not care/cringe about what's happening in the chapter, then i check the comments to laugh at the both sides

 

[mgRdr]

The release schedule has never changed. Every 2 weeks is the release schedule. I don't understand how that wouldn't be a pacing issue.

And I don't understand how that is a pacing issue.

 

[Dingo777]

I think my biggest issue is that Yuu from the Hikari chapters doesn’t act like a dude who, at this point, has gotten laid dozens of times. Which makes it feel like the writer decided they preferred Yami over Hikari and decided that she gets to fuck Yuu and be all lovey dovey. It smacks of writing by the seat of your pants and disrespecting your readers.

If you disliked where your story was going then write a different story. Don’t flip the bird to your readers and derail shit because you Stan a new waifu.

 

[NotSomeone]

Stopping the story mid-climax for a protracted flashback is generally regarded as poor writing. Which I agree with, the author got lost in the sauce and lost sight of what his story was about and what drew his readers in.

You don't write stories with the flow. Every story needs some planing.
Taking that into account, I don't think he ever lost sight of his story OR that he got lost in the sauce.
They had an idea, a good one I would argue, but his execution is lacking.
The author wanted a shocking story, he wanted the whiplash from cute to tragedy, and thats alright a lot of stuff does that - but the flashback right now is dragging for a LONG time and It happened at the most tense point of Hikari's arc.
So all that tension and sadness and emotion we had from Hikari seeing both kissing is lost on us, it has been lost for a long time.
I would argue this whole flashback arc should've happened before or after the school festival, but not right in the middle at it's climax.

 

[noleafclover75]

I think my biggest issue is that Yuu from the Hikari chapters doesn’t act like a dude who, at this point, has gotten laid dozens of times. Which makes it feel like the writer decided they preferred Yami over Hikari and decided that she gets to fuck Yuu and be all lovey dovey. It smacks of writing by the seat of your pants and disrespecting your readers.

If you disliked where your story was going then write a different story. Don’t flip the bird to your readers and derail shit because you Stan a new waifu.

I disagree with this, I think this was always the way the story was headed. It is Maruto-sensei after all.

 

[Alzu]

I think my biggest issue is that Yuu from the Hikari chapters doesn’t act like a dude who, at this point, has gotten laid dozens of times.

We are seeing Yuu from Hikari's perspective, and let's just say, she's a bit unreliable. Also, her flirting technique is really lacking if putting her back on Yuu's back is the closest she can come up with.

 

[mgRdr]

And I don't understand how that is a pacing issue.

You posted numbers of 8 months and 3 months and said it is bad pacing. 3 is less than 8, yes, but what does this arithmetic has to do with manga quality, and how exactly pacing as you define it would've been better if those two numbers were different?

 

[Dingo777]

You don't write stories with the flow. Every story needs some planing.
Taking that into account, I don't think he ever lost sight of his story OR that he got lost in the sauce.
They had an idea, a good one I would argue, but his execution is lacking.
The author wanted a shocking story, he wanted the whiplash from cute to tragedy, and thats alright a lot of stuff does that - but the flashback right now is dragging for a LONG time and It happened at the most tense point of Hikari's arc.
So all that tension and sadness and emotion we had from Hikari seeing both kissing is lost on us, it has been lost for a long time.
I would argue this whole flashback arc should've happened before or after the school festival, but not right in the middle at it's climax.

That’s why I specified “protracted”. A couple quick flashback chapters? Yeah that would have worked, the pace would be maintained and the drama would have felt more natural.

At this point it’s kinda just a indirect humiliation arc for Hikari, which feels entirely undeserved. Like if Hikari was a bad person then It’d feel justified but she’s not, so it feels like the author lost the plot and just wants to write as much cute lovey dovey stuff for his new fav as he can before he’s dragged kicking and screaming back to the present.

 

[favine]

damn it man. Now I'm going to feel bad when the break-up happens cause you can really tell that he is her bright light, but she can't escape her darkness... Fuck man, I hate stories like this to where I have to pick between two girls for the ML ship.

I DON'T WANT SADNESS
I WANT HAPPINESS. ALWAYS.

 

[Panino]

That translation note in the end... IT GOT BIBLICAL.
Literally a battle between Light and Darkness.
It's Lost all over again.

 

[Deadlybat]

We are seeing Yuu from Hikari's perspective, and let's just say, she's a bit unreliable. Also, her flirting technique is really lacking if putting her back on Yuu's back is the closest she can come up with.

I don't think that's an accurate assessment. While it's true we were viewing events from Hikari's perspective, that doesn't mean everything we saw of Yuu was solely filtered through her lens. She's not as unreliable a narrator as some might believe. Take this panel from chapter 18, for instance:

Here, Hikari and Yuu are sitting without looking at each other. She has no way of knowing that Yuu is also blushing, yet we, as the audience, are shown that he is. This highlights that not everything we've seen of Yuu comes solely from Hikari's perspective.

 

[LordTartaros]

The short form is a quite trash format imo with the twist this series went with. The friggin chapters seems to drag on foreeeever.

 

[Nobi]

I see they finally put the main character in the cover.

 

[wrpd_mnd]

Shit. This chapter hints that what breaks them up has likely already happened. Yami did something. Last chapter it was her deciding there just needed to be one more push, her mother would leave her step father and her "future" would be secured.

To me that only hints at her doing something very, very stupid especially since we jumped from there to beginning of summer. Something like seducing her step father (who was hinted at making moves at her) and making sure her mother found out.