page 7 : does the 2 snow brothers go back to their village and place the flowers on the village 's grave ?
page 27 :
- a cherry slime monster appears .
- spider boy : i will pop your cherry , lol , pun . https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/pop_the_cherry .
page 32 : note that fox girl hold her chop-sticks in the wrong way .
page 38 : this is so wrong , a young girl transforms into an old man , and she grows some wrinkled , old , smelly , hairy d!ck and balls , lol .
page 42 : i think these lines will sound more smooth :
- iyo-hime , i want you ..... , and your power .
- lets do "it" many more times , together ..... , and by "it" , i mean training .
- please spend your time with me ...... to train .