Dex-chan lover
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I'm done, this just reminds me of a certain old anime trope and it annoys me. Early to mid 2010's shounen anime, ya know the ones where the MC's denser than a block of lead, "romance" was essentially just tacked on their because everyone else is doing it, and of course the MC's a boring naive pacifist where they never kill a thing beyond maybe demons/demon king? Yeah sadly this work has 1 of those things, and it's the naive "I won't harm a fly" types.....
Ok so maybe that's not that bad, at least they touch grass more often than authors in that era... moving on, plot development is... a thing? Like there's a lot of moving parts, in the background, for future events. That's right all the development is so focused on the future that the present has things that are overlooked.
Edit: I accidentally hit post... screw it I'm not writing more of my rant, I have a feeling that I'd just nitpick further of every detail justified or not
Ok so maybe that's not that bad, at least they touch grass more often than authors in that era... moving on, plot development is... a thing? Like there's a lot of moving parts, in the background, for future events. That's right all the development is so focused on the future that the present has things that are overlooked.
The bodyguard doesn't kill, why? His employer is in danger and he's surrounded by 9 dudes, the fact he doesn't kill them doesn't really make sense cause keeping them alive is more difficult.... especially when your weapon id a sword.... also if you are used to a shield, shouldn't you ask your employer for one to better protect him? He can kinda just magic one up for you. I have a feeling the author realized late and this was his remedy.
The woman feels like the author doesn't know how to articulate a woman. What they are trying to tack on is... it's just off, there's this nagging feeling that they just don't fully understand the perceptive of their own character.
The woman feels like the author doesn't know how to articulate a woman. What they are trying to tack on is... it's just off, there's this nagging feeling that they just don't fully understand the perceptive of their own character.
Edit: I accidentally hit post... screw it I'm not writing more of my rant, I have a feeling that I'd just nitpick further of every detail justified or not