As always, thanks for the better translation. Back with the nitpicking:
Page 2: Contextually "I went out of my way to lead an army here myself" doesn't fit with the other text of "given the worthless task of taking control of a frontier village." A more accurate translation is probably "I was forced to lead an army here" or something like that.
Page 6: Based on their actions, "Now, break open the gates!" would fit better.
Page 11: "Boil them or burn them... something like that, I suppose." I'm assuming a Japanese idiom is being used here that doesn't translate well to English. Per the other translator, the intent of the line is something along the lines of "We can do whatever we want to them."
Page 15: "In many ways" should be "In any case"
Page 16: "Still" should be "As always" or "Like normal" or anything along those lines.
Page 20: There's only a single wyvern and puppeteer mage, so the references should be singular.
Page 31: "My armor" should be "His armor"