@totalvamp There are some weird sentences that stood out the most to me.
Page 3: Do you still not feel confident in my appearance?
Wasn't she just boasting about herself, like "I'm kind of confident in my looks"?
Page 4: When I left the house, I couldn't comeback until I found a marriage partner...
Shouldn't it be "I already told them I wou'dn't comeback until I found a marriage partner so don't worry"?
Page 5: Although she's a pushy woman...
Missing the part "it saved me"?
Page 9: >
Your majesty! > I want to marry
with Baron Cain
Page 11: Seems like you fixed it.