Watashi no Kokoro wa Oji-san de Aru - Ch. 36

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Got another snipe lmao!

Kinda break my heart a little💔:notlikethis:


oh yea, also, here's one bonus drawing that didn't make it on the note page because it's kinda feel out of place
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oh thank God, I clicked that other one too fast and hurt myself before I bowed out
 
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Just some quicky feedback of some bits that I noticed:

3.1 - first bubble here is a little wonky / missing punctuation + capitals
6.2 - East's reasoning here still feels a bit strange to say out loud? something about 'travelling, chasing' makes for an odd combo in English because you're kind of repeating two words for 'movement' back-to-back. I'd probably try to split it up a bit - 'As part of my travels, I've been chasing that person for a while now' maybe
7.1 - 'They sometimes subjugate' or 'they're known to subjugate' imo
9.1 - s h o u g a n a i -> I think the same advice applies where I'd turn this into something like 'I'm the best person for the job' since that's the context it's being said in
 
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The reverse kabadon is hilarious. In the novel she just slowly lowers her arms to her sides and he can't stop her. The manga appears to be ship-teasing East/Haruka even more than the novel does. Corin would be pleased.

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Also they start suspecting he's a vampire MUCH EARLIER than in the novel where they're actually somewhat surprised when he admits to being a half-vampire several hundred chapters later.
 

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