Thank you for the effort. The translation is much better, although I can tell that English isn't your first language due to a few errors and some odd phrasing. For example, on page 5, it should be "Did you just call me a pain in the ass?", because the Simple Present form of the verb is used with "did". But these are minor issues.
Are you simply editing the existing translation, or are you picking this up to translate? I'm really interested in the manga and really wish someone would pick it up for good.