Rebuild World - Ch. 61

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I fixed all the mistakes from the comment. Please let me know if there's something I missed.
Sorry, my laptop broke, and I've been working from someone else's laptop and it didn't have the fonts or anything at all. I know that is no excuse for missing so many things...
Will do better next chapter.
 
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Page 4 top right - how we will split our profits
Page 12 bottom right - It's Shikarabe from Drancam
Page 15 middle panel left - You should be careful
Page 16 top right - you should be a bit more confident

Some errors that I came across while reading
 
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Alpha is not amused at all, that others interfere with its toy ally growth.
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its been a while since I read the WN and this arc specifically- Does Akira seem more.. distrusting of Alpha in the manga compared to the WN??? Or at least, he seems more aware what their relationship really is. In the WN he was a lot simpler minded and seemed easier for alpha to control. At least from what I remember that is.
 
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its been a while since I read the WN and this arc specifically- Does Akira seem more.. distrusting of Alpha in the manga compared to the WN??? Or at least, he seems more aware what their relationship really is. In the WN he was a lot simpler minded and seemed easier for alpha to control. At least from what I remember that is.
Distrusting of Alpha? No, not even almost.
More aware? Absolutely!
Like in the WN, Akira doesn't catch or even consider everything Alpha does to guide him, but he understands in totality that all of this is training and support is preparing him for Alpha's ultimate task, and accepts that as fact.
LN/Manga Akira though has a lot more agency and particularly stronger relationships with those around him (most of the girls here, except Sheryl... yet).
 
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Still a few mistakes in the script.

P4
How will we split
Should be
How we will split

The font in the first bubble on p9 seems like a miss but I could be wrong.

P11
Our today's plans
Should be either
Our plans
Or
Today's plans

P15
Be speaking like that
Should be either
Speaking like that
Or
To be speaking like that

P15
You look down too much on yourself
Should be
You look down on yourself too much

P19
Should be
Or
As she's contemplating, not scoffing.

P22
But currently waiting for their confirmation
Should be
But I'm still waiting for their confirmation
You can use "currently" as well, I suppose, though it sounds a bit stiff and unnatural.

P23 has the word "instead" thrice in one panel, where once would suffice.
E.g.
Instead of involving themselves
Could be
Rather than involving themselves
And
Why would they ... instead?
The "instead" here can simply be omitted.

P28 has the word "request" thrice in one panel as well.
This request is not an official request
Could be more natural like
This is not an official request
And
This is plainly a request between us hunters
Could be
This is just a deal between us hunters

P28
First, I want you to agree on this
Should be
I want you to agree to this first.
Agreeing to is for demands or queries, agreeing on is for arguments or issues.
When using "first" at the start of a sentence it should be "firstly", but that sounds a bit stiff.

I'm sure I saw a few more, but I believe they were fixed while I was writing this.
I believe a page is missing, so the above page numbers might be off.

Thanks for the chapter as always. Looking forward to the next one with QC back to the usual level.
 
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Wow, while re-reading the chapter I have a feeling a page (at least one) got lost somehow... (Maybe during doing revisions?)

At the moment Page 11 ends with "let's not encounter them", and Page 12 starts abruptly with "That means a lot of hunters were killed by them."
I remember there was a ~week long time-skip with mentioning the bounties being multiplied before the current Page 12...

Edit:
Seems like Nyanu fixed it. :win:
 
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Still a few mistakes in the script.

P4

Should be


The font in the first bubble on p9 seems like a miss but I could be wrong.

P11

Should be either

Or


P15

Should be either

Or


P15

Should be


P19

Should be

Or

As she's contemplating, not scoffing.

P22

Should be

You can use "currently" as well, I suppose, though it sounds a bit stiff and unnatural.

P23 has the word "instead" thrice in one panel, where once would suffice.
E.g.

Could be

And

The "instead" here can simply be omitted.

P28 has the word "request" thrice in one panel as well.

Could be more natural like

And

Could be


P28

Should be

Agreeing to is for demands or queries, agreeing on is for arguments or issues.
When using "first" at the start of a sentence it should be "firstly", but that sounds a bit stiff.

I'm sure I saw a few more, but I believe they were fixed while I was writing this.
I believe a page is missing, so the above page numbers might be off.

Thanks for the chapter as always. Looking forward to the next one with QC back to the usual level.
Wanna PR the next chapter for us?
 

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